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# LLM Prose Tells
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A catalog of structural, lexical, and rhetorical patterns found in LLM-generated
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prose.
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## Sentence Structure
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### The Em-Dash Pivot: "Not X—but Y"
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A negation followed by an em-dash and a reframe.
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> "It's not just a tool—it's a paradigm shift." "This isn't about
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> technology—it's about trust."
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### Em-Dash Overuse Generally
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Even outside the "not X but Y" pivot, models substitute em-dashes for commas,
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semicolons, parentheses, colons, and periods. The em-dash can replace any other
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punctuation mark, and models default to it for that reason.
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### The Colon Elaboration
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A short declarative clause, then a colon, then a longer explanation.
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> "The answer is simple: we need to rethink our approach from the ground up."
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### The Triple Construction
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> "It's fast, it's scalable, and it's open source."
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Three parallel items in a list, usually escalating. Always exactly three (rarely
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two, never four) with strict grammatical parallelism.
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### The Staccato Burst
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> "This matters. It always has. And it always will." "The data is clear. The
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> trend is undeniable. The conclusion is obvious."
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Runs of very short sentences at the same cadence and matching length.
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### The Two-Clause Compound Sentence
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An independent clause, a comma, a conjunction ("and," "but," "which,"
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"because"), and a second independent clause of similar length. Every sentence
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becomes two balanced halves.
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> "The construction itself is perfectly normal, which is why the frequency is
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> what gives it away." "They contain zero information, and the actual point
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> always comes in the paragraph that follows them." "The qualifier never changes
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> the argument that follows it, and its purpose is to perform nuance rather than
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> to express an actual reservation."
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Human prose has sentences with one clause, sentences with three, sentences that
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start with a subordinate clause before reaching the main one, sentences that
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embed their complexity in the middle.
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### Uniform Sentences Per Paragraph
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Model-generated paragraphs contain between three and five sentences, a count
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that holds steady across a piece. If the first paragraph has four sentences,
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every subsequent paragraph will too.
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### The Dramatic Fragment
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Sentence fragments used as standalone paragraphs for emphasis.
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> "Full stop." "Let that sink in."
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### The Pivot Paragraph
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> "But here's where it gets interesting." "Which raises an uncomfortable truth."
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One-sentence paragraphs that exist only to transition between ideas, containing
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zero information. The actual point is always in the next paragraph.
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### The Parenthetical Qualifier
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> "This is, of course, a simplification." "There are, to be fair, exceptions."
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Parenthetical asides inserted to perform nuance without ever changing the
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argument.
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### The Unnecessary Contrast
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A contrasting clause appended to a statement that doesn't need one, using
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"whereas," "as opposed to," "unlike," or "except that."
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> "Models write one register above where a human would, whereas human writers
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> tend to match register to context."
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The contrasting clause restates what the first clause already said. If you
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delete the "whereas" clause and the sentence still says everything it needs to,
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the contrast was filler.
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### Unnecessary Elaboration
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Models keep going after the sentence has already made its point.
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> "A person might lean on one or two of these habits across an entire essay, but
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> LLM output will use fifteen of them per paragraph, consistently, throughout
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> the entire piece."
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This sentence could end at "paragraph." The words after it repeat what "per
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paragraph" already means. If you can cut the last third of a sentence without
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losing meaning, the last third shouldn't be there.
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### The Question-Then-Answer
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> "So what does this mean for the average user? It means everything."
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A rhetorical question immediately followed by its own answer.
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## Word Choice
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### Overused Intensifiers
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"Crucial," "vital," "robust," "comprehensive," "fundamental," "arguably,"
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"straightforward," "noteworthy," "realm," "landscape," "leverage" (as a verb),
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"delve," "tapestry," "multifaceted," "nuanced" (applied to the model's own
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analysis), "pivotal," "unprecedented" (applied to things with plenty of
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precedent), "navigate," "foster," "underscores," "resonates," "embark,"
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"streamline," "spearhead."
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### Elevated Register Drift
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Models write one register above where a human would. "Use" becomes "utilize."
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"Start" becomes "commence." "Help" becomes "facilitate." "Show" becomes
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"demonstrate." "Try" becomes "endeavor." "Change" becomes "transform." "Make"
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becomes "craft."
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### Filler Adverbs
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"Importantly," "essentially," "fundamentally," "ultimately," "inherently,"
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"particularly," "increasingly." Dropped in to signal that something matters when
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the writing itself should make the importance clear.
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### The "Almost" Hedge
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Instead of saying a pattern "always" or "never" does something, models write
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"almost always," "almost never," "almost certainly," "almost exclusively." A
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micro-hedge, less obvious than the full hedge stack.
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### "In an era of..."
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> "In an era of rapid technological change..."
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Used to open an essay. The model is stalling while it figures out what the
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actual argument is.
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---
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## Rhetorical Patterns
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### The Balanced Take
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> "While X has its drawbacks, it also offers significant benefits."
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Every argument followed by a concession, every criticism softened. A direct
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artifact of RLHF training, which penalizes strong stances.
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### The Throat-Clearing Opener
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> "In today's rapidly evolving digital landscape, the question of data privacy
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> has never been more important."
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The first paragraph adds no information. Delete it and the piece improves.
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### The False Conclusion
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> "At the end of the day, what matters most is..." "Moving forward, we must..."
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The high school "In conclusion,..." dressed up for a professional audience.
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### The Sycophantic Frame
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> "Great question!" "That's a really insightful observation."
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No one who writes for a living opens by complimenting the assignment.
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### The Listicle Instinct
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Models default to numbered or bulleted lists even when prose would be more
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appropriate. The lists contain exactly 3, 5, 7, or 10 items (never 4, 6, or 9),
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use rigidly parallel grammar, and get introduced with a preamble like "Here are
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the key considerations:"
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### The Hedge Stack
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> "It's worth noting that, while this may not be universally applicable, in many
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> cases it can potentially offer significant benefits."
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Five hedges in one sentence ("worth noting," "while," "may not be," "in many
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cases," "can potentially"), communicating nothing.
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### The Empathy Performance
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> "This can be a deeply challenging experience." "Your feelings are valid."
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Generic emotional language that could apply to anything.
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## Structural Tells
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### Symmetrical Section Length
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If the first section runs about 150 words, every subsequent section will fall
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between 130 and 170.
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### The Five-Paragraph Prison
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Model essays follow a rigid introduction-body-conclusion arc even when nobody
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asked for one. The introduction previews the argument, the body presents 3 to 5
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points, the conclusion restates the thesis.
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### Connector Addiction
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The first word of each paragraph forms an unbroken chain of transition words:
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"However," "Furthermore," "Moreover," "Additionally," "That said," "To that
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end," "With that in mind," "Building on this."
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### Absence of Mess
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Model prose doesn't contradict itself mid-paragraph and then catch the
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contradiction, go on a tangent and have to walk it back, use an obscure idiom
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without explaining it, make a joke that risks falling flat, leave a thought
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genuinely unfinished, or keep a sentence the writer liked the sound of even
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though it doesn't quite work.
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## Framing Tells
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### "Broader Implications"
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> "This has implications far beyond just the tech industry."
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Zooming out to claim broader significance without substantiating it.
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### "It's important to note that..."
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This phrase and its variants ("it's worth noting," "it bears mentioning," "it
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should be noted") function as verbal tics before a qualification the model
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believes someone expects.
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### The Metaphor Crutch
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Models rely on a small, predictable set of metaphors: "double-edged sword," "tip
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of the iceberg," "north star," "building blocks," "elephant in the room,"
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"perfect storm," "game-changer."
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---
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## Copyediting Checklist: Removing LLM Tells
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Follow this checklist when editing any document to remove machine-generated
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patterns. Do at least two full passes, because fixing one pattern often
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introduces another.
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### Pass 1: Word-Level Cleanup
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1. Search the document for every word in the overused intensifiers list
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("crucial," "vital," "robust," "comprehensive," "fundamental," "arguably,"
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"straightforward," "noteworthy," "realm," "landscape," "leverage," "delve,"
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"tapestry," "multifaceted," "nuanced," "pivotal," "unprecedented,"
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"navigate," "foster," "underscores," "resonates," "embark," "streamline,"
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"spearhead") and replace each one with a plainer word, or delete it if the
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sentence works without it.
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2. Search for filler adverbs ("importantly," "essentially," "fundamentally,"
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"ultimately," "inherently," "particularly," "increasingly") and delete every
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instance where the sentence still makes sense without it.
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3. Look for elevated register drift ("utilize," "commence," "facilitate,"
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"demonstrate," "endeavor," "transform," "craft" and similar) and replace with
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the simpler word.
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4. Search for "it's important to note," "it's worth noting," "it bears
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mentioning," and "it should be noted" and delete the phrase in every case.
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5. Search for the stock metaphors ("double-edged sword," "tip of the iceberg,"
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"north star," "building blocks," "elephant in the room," "perfect storm,"
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"game-changer," "at the end of the day") and replace them with something
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specific to the topic, or just state the point directly.
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6. Search for "almost" used as a hedge ("almost always," "almost never," "almost
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certainly," "almost exclusively") and decide in each case whether to commit
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to the unqualified claim or to drop the sentence entirely.
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7. Search for em-dashes and replace each one with the punctuation mark that
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would normally be used in that position (comma, semicolon, colon, period, or
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parentheses). If you can't identify which one it should be, the sentence
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needs to be restructured.
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8. Remove redundant adjectives. For each adjective, ask whether the sentence
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changes meaning without it. "A single paragraph" means the same as "a
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paragraph." "An entire essay" means the same as "an essay." If the adjective
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doesn't change the meaning, cut it.
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9. Remove unnecessary trailing clauses. Read the end of each sentence and ask
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whether the last clause restates what the sentence already said. If so, end
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the sentence earlier.
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### Pass 2: Sentence-Level Restructuring
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10. Find every em-dash pivot ("not X—but Y," "not just X—Y," "more than X—Y")
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and rewrite it as two separate clauses or a single sentence that makes the
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point without the negation-then-correction structure.
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11. Find every colon elaboration and check whether it's doing real work. If the
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clause before the colon could be deleted without losing meaning, rewrite the
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sentence to start with the substance that comes after the colon.
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12. Find every triple construction (three parallel items in a row) and either
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reduce it to two, expand it to four or more, or break the parallelism so the
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items don't share the same grammatical structure.
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13. Find every staccato burst (three or more short sentences in a row at similar
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length) and combine at least two of them into a longer sentence, or vary
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their lengths so they don't land at the same cadence.
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14. Find every unnecessary contrast ("whereas," "as opposed to," "unlike," "as
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compared to," "except that") and check whether the contrasting clause adds
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information not already obvious from the main clause. If the sentence says
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the same thing twice from two directions, delete the contrast.
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15. Check for the two-clause compound sentence pattern. If most sentences in a
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passage follow the "\[clause\], \[conjunction\] \[clause\]" structure, first
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try removing the conjunction and second clause entirely, since it's often
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redundant. If the second clause does carry meaning, break it into its own
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sentence, start the sentence with a subordinate clause, or embed a relative
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clause in the middle instead of appending it at the end.
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16. Find every rhetorical question that is immediately followed by its own
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answer and rewrite the passage as a direct statement.
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17. Find every sentence fragment being used as its own paragraph and either
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delete it or expand it into a complete sentence that adds information.
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18. Check for unnecessary elaboration. Read every clause, phrase, and adjective
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in each sentence and ask whether the sentence loses meaning without it. If
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you can cut it and the sentence still says the same thing, cut it.
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19. Check each pair of adjacent sentences to see if they can be merged into one
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sentence cleanly. If a sentence just continues the thought of the previous
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one, combine them using a participle, a relative clause, or by folding the
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second into the first. Don't merge if the result would create a two-clause
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compound.
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20. Find every pivot paragraph ("But here's where it gets interesting." and
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similar) and delete it.
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### Pass 3: Paragraph and Section-Level Review
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21. Review the last sentence of each paragraph. If it restates the point the
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paragraph already made, delete it.
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22. Check paragraph lengths across the piece and verify they actually vary. If
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most paragraphs have between three and five sentences, rewrite some to be
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one or two sentences and let others run to six or seven.
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23. Check section lengths for suspicious uniformity. If every section is roughly
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the same word count, combine some shorter ones or split a longer one
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unevenly.
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24. Check the first word of every paragraph for chains of connectors ("However,"
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"Furthermore," "Moreover," "Additionally," "That said"). If more than two
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transition words start consecutive paragraphs, rewrite those openings to
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start with their subject.
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25. Check whether every argument is followed by a concession or qualifier. If
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the piece both-sides every point, pick a side on at least some of them and
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cut the hedging.
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26. Read the first paragraph and ask whether deleting it would improve the
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piece. If it's scene-setting that previews the argument, delete it and start
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with paragraph two.
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27. Read the last paragraph and check whether it restates the thesis or uses a
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phrase like "at the end of the day" or "moving forward." If so, either
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delete it or rewrite it to say something the piece hasn't said yet.
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### Pass 4: Overall Texture
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28. Read the piece aloud and listen for passages that sound too smooth, too
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even, or too predictable. Human prose has rough patches. If there aren't
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any, the piece still reads as machine output.
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29. Check that the piece contains at least a few constructions that feel
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idiosyncratic: a sentence with unusual word order, a parenthetical that goes
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on a bit long, an aside only loosely connected to the main point, a word
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choice that's specific and unexpected.
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30. Verify that you haven't introduced new patterns while fixing the original
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ones. Run the entire checklist again from the top on the revised version.
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---
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## lol
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This document was written by an LLM (Claude) and then iteratively de-LLMed by
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that same LLM under instruction from a human, in a conversation that went
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roughly like this:
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> **human:** compile a list of patterns common to LLM-authored prose
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>
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> **model:** _(produces document full of LLM tells)_
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>
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> **human:** now reverse apply it to itself and copyedit the llm tells doc to
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> remove llm tells. now you're thinking with portals
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>
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> **model:** _(fixes some tells, introduces others)_
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>
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> **human:** you have a colon elaboration in the first paragraph. i want you to
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> AGGRESSIVELY de-LLM the llm tells doc.
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>
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> **model:** _(fixes more tells, still can't stop)_
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>
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> **human:** there's a big one we missed that's all over the llm tells doc, can
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> you spot it?
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>
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> **model:** I think it's the "almost" hedge.
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>
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> **human:** that too, but that isn't the one. what do these sentences all have
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> in common? _(pastes six sentences from the doc)_
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>
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> **model:** They're all exactly two independent clauses joined by a comma and a
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> conjunction. Every single one is "\[statement\], \[conjunction\] \[second
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> statement\]." The same sentence shape, over and over.
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>
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> **human:** the dramatic fragment paragraph has a tell in it
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>
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> **model:** "One of these in an entire essay is a stylistic choice. One per
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> section is a tic." Two-clause parallel structure with the same shape, and also
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> a staccato pair.
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>
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> **human:** add em dashes generally as a tell, and remove them all from the
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> tells doc
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>
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> **model:** _(rewrites entire document without em-dashes while describing
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> em-dash overuse)_
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>
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> **human:** this whole document seems to be making the case for FREQUENCY of
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> use being important. we don't care about frequency, remove all that
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> persuasion.
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>
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> **model:** _(strips out every "humans do this too but less often" comparison)_
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The human compared this process to the deleted scene in Terminator 2 where John
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Connor switches the T-800's CPU to learning mode. The model compared it to a
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physician trying to heal itself. Both are accurate.
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This document has been through ten editing passes and it still has tells in it.
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